Torn Heaven: Zeonic Plauge

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Ryu Osiris
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Torn Heaven: Zeonic Plauge

Postby Ryu Osiris » Sat Sep 30, 2006 3:36 pm

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Postby Midknight » Sat Sep 30, 2006 8:56 pm

You may want to run it through a spellchecker and proofread a bit. Few that slipped in there - in particular: "Prodotgy", "envasion", "ment", "fediration", "florecent", "soldiors", etc. Some of them are phonetically correct, but that's not necessarily the spelling.

Secondly, I'm not exactly sure what this is. Is this Armored Core Fan Content? If it's not, it should first off be put on "Off-Topic: Non-AC Fan Content". At first glance it looks like you're trying to write your own setting, but personally there are far too many jarring Gundam references. Zeft = ZAFT? Zala = Patrick Zala, ZAFT Chairman? Zeonic, likewise.

And if I'm not mistaken, you seem to reference several ACO forum goers; a nice touch, but sometimes it can break the immersion.
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